WoW – Tiny as Your Thumb

Thumbs up!

It’s write on Wednesday again. This weeks prompt is to imagine you are as tiny as your thumb. You can read the whole prompt here.

I started thinking about this and the idea for a children’s story came to mind… I don’t know if this will be the start of my March picture book for 12×12 in 12 or not, but I hope you like it…

As always, comments & suggestions are welcome.

 

If I was as tiny as your thumb, I could hide in the smallest of places.

If I was as big as a mountain, you could see me from far away.

If I was as long as a river, I could go across the countryside and find some interesting places.

If I was as wide as the ocean, you could find me wherever you go.

If I was as bright as your eyes, you could see me in the dark.

 

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Comments

  1. This would be great to illustrate. It would also work well as a WHAT AM I at the end of the story and see if we guessed right. Like a puzzle almost. Good luck with this cute idea.

  2. I love the thoughtful tone in this piece, especially in the last line. I wonder who the poem is supposed to be speaking to?

    • Melissa says:

      Thanks Sam. I haven’t put too much thought into it yet, but I’m sure the audience will come as I work on it more 🙂

  3. I like the rhythm in the this. I think it has great potential for a kids book. I think some great illustrations to go with it would work really well and more “if I .. I could..” to stretch kids minds. Great work. Meg

    • Melissa says:

      Thanks Meg – I was thinking of using size as a starting point – such as tiny as a thumb, large as a mountain, etc… still needs work, but it’s getting there 🙂

  4. very neat poem… so telling on the ways to be….

  5. I agree it’s a great theme to a children’s book. There’s pretty awesome imagery with a giant child moulding into the shapes of the landscape. I think kids love that sort of thing – being giants and seeing the world from a tiny perspective as well. The only thing I tripped up on was the word repetition of ‘places’, very close together. It suits the first line well because it’s generic, but perhaps a different word to conjure thoughts of other lands? Unless you meant to use it twice poetically… then ignore me. 🙂

    • Melissa says:

      Thanks Melinda – it does need work – this was a very rough, minutes of consciousness type work. I hadn’t done any edits when I posted it, just wanted to get it up!

  6. Great poem 🙂
    I agree it would be great illustrated as a kids book.

  7. Cute and wonderful poem. I love the idea behind it, and I would love to read more. Super writing!

  8. I thought this was really touching and beautiful! It would be a great children’s story!

  9. Sarah Mac says:

    So wanted to say something original! 😉

    But, I have to agree with everyone that said this has the makings of a great childrens book – I think you should work on this and see where it takes you.

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